In this entry I'll post two sentences of my own posts that shows "telling scenes" and I'll rewrite it into a "showing scene" to shows the differences between both.
- Telling:
"On Friday night we have a family tacos night, it was pretty fun because it is my boyfriend’s family and it is been more than a year they hadn’t gotten together because some differences."
"That night he went to bed and while he was sleeping in the middle of the night before I went to bed I went to his room and put money under his pillow, looking for the tooth as well".
-Showing:
" Outside was dark , cold and the moon was lighting up a regular Friday night in winter time; There is a big house in the town of Audobon in New Jersey , but it's a warm and homie environment all around, its grandma's house, forgetting any differences a small family who hasn't gotten together in awhile was laughing and having a fun lovely taco night for dinner, they were tasty and delicious, it was grandma recipe."
"It's a regular night during the week in a family house, a little 10 years boy lost one of his baby teeth while he was eating dinner. The clock displays 8:30pm it's time for bed, kids are going up stairs to get ready for bed. The little boy skipping around on the hallways takes the stairs and goes up to his bed. He is all excited to put his tooth under the pillow awaiting for tooth fairy to reward him. It's 10:30, the kids are in a deep sleep, it's time for me to go to bed. but before I head to bed I stop by at the little boy's room, I open the door cautiously, he is in a baby position facing the window, he doesn't notice I'm there. I walk towards him, smoothly I dig my hand into his pillow looking for his tooth and also leave a bag with money for him as a reward, tooth fairy has come. "
- Telling:
"On Friday night we have a family tacos night, it was pretty fun because it is my boyfriend’s family and it is been more than a year they hadn’t gotten together because some differences."
"That night he went to bed and while he was sleeping in the middle of the night before I went to bed I went to his room and put money under his pillow, looking for the tooth as well".
-Showing:
" Outside was dark , cold and the moon was lighting up a regular Friday night in winter time; There is a big house in the town of Audobon in New Jersey , but it's a warm and homie environment all around, its grandma's house, forgetting any differences a small family who hasn't gotten together in awhile was laughing and having a fun lovely taco night for dinner, they were tasty and delicious, it was grandma recipe."
"It's a regular night during the week in a family house, a little 10 years boy lost one of his baby teeth while he was eating dinner. The clock displays 8:30pm it's time for bed, kids are going up stairs to get ready for bed. The little boy skipping around on the hallways takes the stairs and goes up to his bed. He is all excited to put his tooth under the pillow awaiting for tooth fairy to reward him. It's 10:30, the kids are in a deep sleep, it's time for me to go to bed. but before I head to bed I stop by at the little boy's room, I open the door cautiously, he is in a baby position facing the window, he doesn't notice I'm there. I walk towards him, smoothly I dig my hand into his pillow looking for his tooth and also leave a bag with money for him as a reward, tooth fairy has come. "